Lauren –
I enjoyed your style of writing. You have lots of ideas and reading your writing seems very natural. In your 10/5 post, I think that you could’ve used citations to help support your own personal ideas/arguments. I also enjoyed how you said that life is too short to look for the one perfect soulmate and it is very true how there are a variety of views about love across a spectrum based on people’s personal beliefs. Also, on your 10/7 post, I think you could’ve organized your beliefs better to aid in supporting your argument.
Ricky-
Pay attention to small grammatical and spelling errors, especially in the first paragraph of your 10/5 post. I also think that you could do better at organization so that you state your thoughts in a more concise manner. This will be easier for your readers to read as I particularly found it semi-confusing. I enjoyed how you stated that there would be no more mysteriousness and that people would view relationships more scientifically. That is definitely true! For your 10/7 post, your first two sentences seem a little ambiguous. There was also a spelling error in paragraph 3 (“threw” vs. through). I also enjoyed how you included scripture from the bible to give evidence for the opposite view.
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